Yesterday Room 4 visited the Marine Reserve we went to go snorkeling. We walked down the beach to a snorkeling spot. Then we walked out on the rocks to put our flippers on. I went with Momo's mum.
I dove in the water "Brrr its freezing." l said. Then I couldn't see anything in the water. When I opened my eyes l saw the still seaweed in the water.
I went back to shore because I was cold. Then I play with the rocks . Then I saw a rock slip happen so we walked to it but it had finished.
I lazily walked to the green grass to have lunch . Then we talked about my fravit thing. The little seaweed was my favourite thing. Then we had to go back to school.
The End
Thursday, 25 June 2020
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Hello it is Oliver Tilghman here,
ReplyDeleteI like that you told the reader what was next. It reminds me of a place in Fiji that I went snorkeling but I found millions of fish. My favourite thing you said is you found a little seaweed it sounded very small. You could reduce putting 'then' on the start of each sentence.